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Looking for a critique partner listings, April 19th 2013

 

aldreaalien – SCIENCE FICTION & FANTASY

I’m planning to self publish and have reached the Beta Reader stage for my Adult Science Fantasy story (58,000 words long).
Feedback is needed mostly on plot, pacing, characters and, since its the first of four novels, the ending.
Blurb …

Koral was born a product of genetic manipulation and knew little of the world beyond the steel walls of home. Until, on one unhappy night, he flees into the desert. But the sands he must brave are full of more than mere monsters.
This is a world ruled by instinct, where innocence is drowned in blood. Here, men are sacrificed to the great Serpent God Lorric only to emerge as the most feared killers on the planet.
The Rogues.
With the god’s sights set on turning him into a legend, Koral must sacrifice himself to survive and become … The Rogue King.

The first chapter can be found here: http://thardrandia.blogspot.com/p/the-rogue-king-first-chapter.html

If you’re interested, or want more details, message or email me: aldreaalien (at) yahoo.co.nz

jadziab – YOUNG ADULT

Hi!

I am looking for a straight-up beta reader or two for my current WIP. I don’t want line critiques at this point, just someone to read my entire book and answer some questions upon finishing it.

My WIP is a YA sci-fi that rests heavily in the contemporary genre. Some agents and readers have told me it lacks world-building (I think because of the contemporary aspect), so I’d love feedback on what works or if I need to ditch some of the contemporary/our time stuff and make it really different.

I’d be willing to do the same in return for whoever–read the entire book and answer some questions, or possible critique a MS. My schedule is pretty tight right now, so critiquing a MS would take me a bit longer than just reading it.

Check out my profile for more information on the project I’m looking for feedback on, and a little more about me.

Thanks!

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Looking for a Critique Partner listing, April 12th 2013

Looking for a Critique Partner listing, April 12th 2013

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@saillenuinn – YOUNG ADULT

Hey folks! I’m looking for another CP to read through a completed YA paranormal. 89K. Longer pitch is in my profile, but the twitter-length pitch is: A ring of safety? As if. His Ouroboros is a circle of death, pumping out one ashy corpse at a time. Now Liese must destroy it. If interested, DM me. Will gladly trade chapters.

 

@patricia09 – ROMANCE

Hey everyone, I’m Patricia.

I’m currently writing 2 novels, one is a New Adult Fantasy loosely based on Red Riding Hood, and another one is an M/M contemporary with a little bit of food magic. I know the second is something that people find a little bit harder to critique for but I’m looking for someone who is flexible and open minded, and who doesn’t mind steamy scenes… as it’ll be getting steamy for both of these.

I should also say that I’m looking for long term critique partners, I kind of want to have a friendship and have fun at the same time, people who want to bounce ideas back and forth now and then!

At the moment I’m 12k into my NA Fantasy and only 1k into my M/M romance but I’ve only just settled into my new writing routine so I’m hoping it’ll render more than that and that I’ll have something more solid by April.

I’m very deadline orientated because it keeps me on track and on top of myself. I’ve critiqued before, but I tend to focus more on pacing, character voice and consistency.

I enjoy Sci-Fi, Fantasy, Steampunk, Erotica, YA/NA, M/M so I’d be happy to critique for any of those genres if they contain a romance theme (though the romance doesn’t even have to be the main focus of the story). I’m okay with explicit scenes and kinks too, so I’d be happy to critique those.

I haven’t had a regular critique partner since university, so to start with I’d say I can read and critique about 60 pages per week, 2 – 3 chapters.

Um, that’s it lol. Check out my profile or message me if there’s anything else you’d like to know.

 

@mjsdesert – ROMANCE

Hi, I’m new to LWC and very excited about the site. I’m in major need of a CP for my humorous mystery that has a heavy romance subplot. Please message me if you are interested.

 

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Looking for a Critique Partner listings, April 5th 2013

If we’ve missed you, leave a comment on this post! Happy weekend!

 

@saillenuinn – YOUNG ADULT

Hey folks! I’m looking for another CP to read through a completed YA paranormal. 89K. Longer pitch is in my profile, but the twitter-length pitch is: A ring of safety? As if. His Ouroboros is a circle of death, pumping out one ashy corpse at a time. Now Liese must destroy it. If interested, DM me. Will gladly trade chapters.

 

@lindseymf SCI-FI ROMANCE

Hey all! I’m looking for a CP for my YA sci-fi romance. (Light sci-fi) I’m currently working through a second draft. I’m hoping to make a lasting connection with someone who’ll enjoy my work but also be completely honest with me. I’m experienced with critiquing and would love to swap a few chapters with someone to see if we might be a “match”. If you’re interested, please let me know! I love most YA/NA with the exception of heavy, heavy fantasy. Here is a little bit about my WIP:

To Save My Life

The development of a fully functioning AI would be world–and life shattering–news. This is the reason why Aiden’s existence is kept secret from those outside A.I.R.’s facilities. He was their greatest creation until something went wrong.

Aiden’s thoughts and emotions are much too…human.

He’s deemed defective and his destruction is ordered. Breaking out of A.I.R.’s compound is his only chance at survival, if he can just get passed the secured doors—complete with fingerprinting and retinal eye scans—and armed guards. A chance run-in with Eva offers them both a choice. His life’s already at stake but hers doesn’t have to be if she just walks away. Eva can’t turn away from the simple fact that what they want is murder.

A.I.R. and the head of Project A.I.D.E.N.—Eva’s father—are looking for him and the two of them know they can’t run forever. Some people have secrets they’ll do anything to keep.

 

 

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Looking for Critique Partner listings, March 29th 2013

Looking for Critique Partner listings, March 29th 2013

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Just a couple today. Happy Easter!

taraqueen–  YOUNG ADULT

I am working on a journal/novel of a young adult who gets into more trouble than she bargained for trying to be a good person and she tarnishes her good family’s name, as well as her own.

The Phyre Embers: PROLOGUE

Sunday, July 1, 2012
Late evening

Dear readers,

My name is Sapphyre Smith. I am writing this journal because I am terrified of what might happen to me. In the event of my death, you need to know that it was not accidental. I was murdered. Most likely, quite brutally.

Rest my soul,
Sapphyre Smith

oliviastjames – SHORT STORIES

I like stories that are short, dirty and kind of kinky. Is there anyone out there who would like to be my crit buddy who’s willing to work with me?

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Looking for Critique Partner listings, March 22nd 2013

Looking for Critique Partner listings, March 22nd 2013

magnifying-glass@katesparkes – SCIENCE FICTION & FANTASY

  • Hello! Let me tell you a little about my story, and then what kind of partner I’ll work best with:

My novel (100,000 words at last draft, might end up a bit shorter) is a YA novel set in another world, which technically would make it high fantasy, but the story is told in a more contemporary tone than many in the genre.

 

It’s a story about a young woman who thinks she has no choice about where her life is going: marriage to a fantastic-on-paper man she’s not sure she loves, popping out as many kids as she can to support her nation’s failing population, life in the city, and just maybe a cure for the headaches that have plagued her since childhood. Everything is turned upside down the day she accidentally saves the life of a sorcerer who is one of her people’s most feared enemies, and she learns that nothing– not her people, not magic, not even herself– is what she thought. And that’s just the first 5 chapters…

 

There’s danger, adventure, love (and the physical display of such, a little), murder, dancing, dragons… but I promise that it all makes sense together. Just a warning, there is some violence, and talk about children and babies dying, if you’re sensitive to that.

 

So… What I’m looking for is someone interested in reading over my current draft when it’s finished, either as I get it done or when it’s finished in the next few months. I’ve had positive reactions to my last draft, but I thought it could still be better. I’m the kind of person who wants to know the things that my partner finds confusing and the things that don’t work, but we’ll get along better if constructive criticism is mixed in with observations on what you think IS working. Yes, I need thicker skin, I know.

 

As for what I can offer to a partner, what do you need? I can do critiques on story, characters, etc. in broad terms or in detail. I’m a great cheerleader and enjoy encouraging other writers. I’m an avid reader, and like to think I have a decent eye for grammar, sentence structure, and dialogue, even if I couldn’t tell you what a dangling participle is if I had one hanging out of my nose. I’d prefer to work on a complete work so that I can critique the story as a whole as well as on a chapter-by-chapter level, but I’m really flexible.

 

I’d be interested in exchanging a few chapters with people to see if we’d be a good match; if we’re going to trade work, I’d like to know that I’m interested enough in a story to offer it my best (and that goes both ways, of course!)

 

Thanks for reading my ramble.

 

maggiemeroney – WOMEN’S FICTION/CHICK LIT

I’m looking for a CP for my WIP. Right now it’s at about 31K and I hope to have about 80-90K when finished. It’s about a New Orleans mortician who’s more comfortable surrounded by death than she is trying to forge relationships with the living. When her beloved older brother dies suddenly and she starts seeing his ghost, her faith in both the living and dead is shaken to the core. You can contact me at jennm247(at)gmail.com

 

sasha – ROMANCE

Hello everyone! I’m looking for a CP. I’m a little more than half way done with my novel. Although I have a timeframe and I know when I want my WIP to be done. I find myself stuck. I’m very flexible. Willing to exchange scenes, pages, or chapters at a time. Although critiquing isn’t something I’ve done before, I’ve read so many books in many different genres and I know a good book. My WIP is paranormal romance with explicit love scenes. Let me know if you’re interested in pairing up. Let me know if you have any questions. Thank you.

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Looking for a Critique Partner Listings March 15th 2013

aldreaalien – SCIENCE FICTION & FANTASY

I’ve several stories always on the lookout for fresh eyes.
But the one that’s first and foremost is my Paranormal, Golden Dawn. Which has just been rewritten and is now at 50,000 words.

I lean more towards fantasy (epic is my drug of choice) in my reading, though science-fictions and paranormals are welcome. Please, no horror. I’m happy to read both YA and Adult in these genres. I’m more comfortable in critiquing third person povs as that’s what I write in, but I can do first person.
Right now, I am able to do weekly feedback on a chapter by chapter basis.

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Herald, eldest son of a bloodthirsty strigoi, endured two centuries of hell before escaping into the human world. He watched, helpless, as his twin brother was murdered by the very villagers his father insists on raiding. Though he has reservations about his father’s human-only diet, Herald has nevertheless devoted all of his 1100 years towards protecting his family from outsiders.

Bewildered by his orders to guard the giant crystal held within the castle, Herald doesn’t expect it to hold the spirit of an angel. She is his father’s failed attempt to gain true immortality. One he cannot be rid of. Breaking the crystal would free her, but the uncontained magic would level their sheltered valley. Herald’s deranged sister doesn’t care. She’d rather risk destruction than let the angel influence another sibling.

When the angel’s continued existence becomes more important to Herald than his siblings, it results in that sister’s death and his banishment. But the angel has taken mortal form in preparation to leave this world and her immortal-gifting blood is free for the taking. Now Herald must decide whether his true loyalty lies with his family or his heart. Either choice will demand death. Only the right path will ensure the life taken is not his.

katesparkes – SCIENCE FICTION & FANTASY

Hello! Let me tell you a little about my story, and then what kind of partner I’ll work best with:

My novel (100,000 words at last draft, might end up a bit shorter) is a YA novel set in another world, which technically would make it high fantasy, but the story is told in a more contemporary tone than many in the genre.

It’s a story about a young woman who thinks she has no choice about where her life is going: marriage to a fantastic-on-paper man she’s not sure she loves, popping out as many kids as she can to support her nation’s failing population, life in the city, and just maybe a cure for the headaches that have plagued her since childhood. Everything is turned upside down the day she accidentally saves the life of a sorcerer who is one of her people’s most feared enemies, and she learns that nothing– not her people, not magic, not even herself– is what she thought. And that’s just the first 5 chapters…

There’s danger, adventure, love (and the physical display of such, a little), murder, dancing, dragons… but I promise that it all makes sense together. Just a warning, there is some violence, and talk about children and babies dying, if you’re sensitive to that.

So… What I’m looking for is someone interested in reading over my current draft when it’s finished, either as I get it done or when it’s finished in the next few months. I’ve had positive reactions to my last draft, but I thought it could still be better. I’m the kind of person who wants to know the things that my partner finds confusing and the things that don’t work, but we’ll get along better if constructive criticism is mixed in with observations on what you think IS working. Yes, I need thicker skin, I know.

As for what I can offer to a partner, what do you need? I can do critiques on story, characters, etc. in broad terms or in detail. I’m a great cheerleader and enjoy encouraging other writers. I’m an avid reader, and like to think I have a decent eye for grammar, sentence structure, and dialogue, even if I couldn’t tell you what a dangling participle is if I had one hanging out of my nose. I’d prefer to work on a complete work so that I can critique the story as a whole as well as on a chapter-by-chapter level, but I’m really flexible.

I’d be interested in exchanging a few chapters with people to see if we’d be a good match; if we’re going to trade work, I’d like to know that I’m interested enough in a story to offer it my best (and that goes both ways, of course!)

Thanks for reading my ramble.

 

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Looking for a Critique Partner Listings, March 1st 2013

Looking for a Critique Partner Listings, March 1st 2013

magnifying-glassI know! It’s flippin March already! Here are the CP listings from the previous week. If you’re not on the list and looking for a CP, leave a comment.


ladyscorpion – ROMANCE (a repeat from last week, still needing a CP)


I’m about 3/4 of the way through a contemporary romance. Right now it’s sitting at about 59k and that’s about the length my books usually end up, so I don’t plan on it getting too much longer (I hope). I’m woefully stuck. I’m at the point where I’m banging my head, and I could use someone to go through it with me.

I’ll read pretty much anything, though I don’t read too much inspirational or paranormal. I can give you as in-depth as you need, though I won’t lie. I’m not a grammar guru. I’m better at characterization, flow, emotion, that kind of thing. Critique wise, I’m looking more for big picture right now rather than super in depth.
Anyway, if you’re interested, send me a message and we can exchange chapters, see if we’d match.


s3gun – CRIME AND MYSTERY

I just finished my crime thriller. First book ever written by me. I kind of think the book starts a bit slow before picking up pace. Maybe that’s just me, so I would really love a pair of fresh eyes to check this out for me. Thanks.


litwit – YOUNG ADULT

Hello, hello, hello!
I’m looking for an extra victi-I mean partner!

WHO I AM:
I am an experienced critic– meaning that I am capable of writing 500-2000 words of feedback on your first paragraph alone. I would appreciate the same from someone else.

I write horror, humour, young adult, and dabble in everything else. My works are often short and may contain violence/language/controversial topics.

WHAT I DO:
I prefer to swap chapter by chapter, or story by story. I swap monthly. I only review fiction novels, stories, and flash fiction.

WHAT I WON’T DO:
I won’t review erotica, cliche supernatural romance, Dungeon & Dragon style Fantasy, or chick lit.

CONTACT ME:
You can reach me through my Facebook Page: http://www.facebook.com/MelindaAtlas

Or, email me!
TheLitWit(@)Hotmail.Com

 

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Excerpt from Jane Porter’s new book, The Good Daughter

Excerpt from Jane Porter’s new book, The Good Daughter

daughter_276Jane Porter’s The Good Daughter is the second in the Brennan sister’s trilogy and is out now! We interviewed Jane for our feature ‘7 Questions, 3 Tips’ back in October and fell in love with her optimism and tips on choosing happiness. In The Good Daughter, Jane examines some complex family dynamics and issues facing the modern woman. Below is an excerpt from chapter 1. 

 

Chapter 1

Make a wish.

And just like that, wishes sprang to mind. One, two, three.

But it wasn’t Kit Brennan who was supposed to be making wishes. It was Cass’s night. The Brennan family had gathered to celebrate Cass’s thirty-sixth birthday at Kit’s childhood home in San Francisco’s inner Sunset district.

There were ten at the table in the Edwardian-period dining room with its high ceiling and elaborate wainscoting, the lights still out, the last of the happy birthday song dying away. Kit. Her parents.  Her sister Meg and her family. Her brother, Tommy, and his wife, Cass, whose birthday they were celebrating.

“Make a wish, Cass,” Mom said from her seat at the head of the table. She’d become painfully thin in the last month but looked happy tonight.

“Make a wish, Aunt Cass,” Meg’s eleven-year-old daughter, Gabi echoed, crowding in close to Cass, unable to contain herself, the flickering candlelight reflected in her shining brown eyes.

“Make a wish, babe,” Tommy Jr. said, patting his wife’s back. “Before your cake catches fi re.”

Cass Brennan crinkled her nose and tucked a long blond curl behind her ear. She’d married into this family eleven years ago and they’d immediately made her one of them. “Not too worried,” she said lightly, even with her candles ablaze. “I’ve got two of the city’s finest firefighters here.”

Dad lifted his hands. “I’ve retired, hon, and we don’t know how good Tommy is. Better make a wish and blow out those candles.”

“Come on, Aunt Cass,” Gabi shouted, trying to be heard above the good-natured laughter.  “Wish for a baby. Wish hard!”

The laughter immediately died.

Cass froze.

Tommy’s shoulders squared aggressively. “We don’t need a baby.”

“Yes, you do, Uncle Tommy,” Gabi argued. “You’ve been wanting a baby for a long time!”

“Time to wish for something else. Like a vacation. Or winning the lottery.”

Cass flinched, as if struck. Tears slowly filled her eyes.

All pretense of happiness was gone. Kit could feel Cass’s grief, was sure everyone else felt it, too. The endless sorrow hung in the dining room, heavy, aching, a tragic specter weighting the room.

Tommy reacted first, his strong jaw—Dad’s jaw—tightening, his blue eyes snapping. He didn’t do this. Didn’t break, grieve, mourn. Not in public. Not even in front of his family. He clapped his hand impatiently on Cass’s slender back, between her shoulder blades. “Come on, babe. Blow out the candles.”

The edge in his voice brought Cass to life. She gulped a breath, leaned toward the tall coconut cake with the fluffy icing, staring at what was left of the candles, formulating the wish before blowing

out the flames in a broken rush of air.

Everyone clapped and the kids cheered. Meg rose and rushed to get the knife and delicate porcelain dessert plates. Jack asked if anyone wanted coffee or tea. Mom wanted tea and Jack headed to the kitchen to make it, and all the while Dad was talking loudly, carrying the small stack of presents from the sideboard to the table, making a big deal about which present Cass would open first. Everyone was talking, busy doing something, but Tommy.

The Good Daughter

Tommy sat stiff and silent and grim in his chair at the corner of the table. Kit refilled water glasses but kept an eye on her brother. She knew Tommy well, could tell from his expression that he was angry, resenting Cass, maybe everyone, for making him into the bad guy. Because that’s what he was thinking, feeling, that they’d all turned him into the villain in the story, and he wasn’t the villain. He was just being honest. Practical.  After six years of trying unsuccessfully to have a baby, Tommy was done.

He didn’t need a baby. He wanted peace. He needed to stay sane.

As Cass cut the cake and Meg assisted by passing the plates around, Kit wondered what Cass had wished for. Was it a baby?  Or was it for Tommy to want a baby again? Because their marriage

was suffering. Both of them were suffering. Kit wasn’t even sure a baby would solve everything anymore.

She suddenly ached with wishes of her own . . .

For Mom’s cancer to go into remission.

For Cass to have her baby.

For Tommy to be happy with Cass again . . .

Later, after cake and presents, Meg’s three kids cleared the dishes from the table, taking them to the kitchen to scrape and stack while Jack and Dad headed outside with Tommy to look at Tommy’s new car, which was really an old car, a 1960 Cadillac he bought on Craigslist for next to nothing and was determined to restore himself.

“Just us now,” Meg said, sitting back in her chair with a soft, appreciative sigh. “The girls.”

Kit was glad, too. She was tight with her sisters, and they were all close with Mom, so close that for the past ten years the five of them had taken an annual girls-only trip together, calling it the Brennan Girls’ Getaway, spending a long weekend or week at the family beach house in Capitola.

On their getaway they’d eat and drink, talk, read, sleep. It was a time to let their hair down, a time to celebrate family, and hopefully a time to feel safe, although the last couple getaways had been tense because of friction between Brianna, Kit’s fraternal twin, and Meg. Cass had missed the last getaway, too, back in May, as she’d been in the middle of an IVF cycle and her doctor wouldn’t let her travel so close to the egg retrieval.

Mom shifted in her high-back chair and focused on Cass. “How are you?”

Mom wasn’t making polite conversation. She was genuinely concerned about Cass, and now that Tommy was gone, this was a chance for Cass to open up . . . if she could. No one was sure that she could, or would. It’d been almost three and a half months since she’d miscarried and this miscarriage had been the worst . . . not just for her, but the whole family. It was her fourth miscarriage, and it’d happened later than the others, this time at twenty-four weeks, just when Cass had let her guard down. Just when she’d started to get excited about the baby.

The entire family had grieved with Cass. All of them had been so happy about the baby, and then their hearts were broken. But this time Tommy didn’t want their meals or phone calls or visits. This time Tommy announced that he and Cass wanted to be alone, and he asked that the family give them space and privacy to deal with the loss their way, in their time.

Kit’s baby sister, Sarah, who lived with her husband and children in Tampa Bay, had been on the phone immediately with Kit and then Meg, hurt, even outraged that Tommy would push them away, but Mom and Dad backed Tommy, insisting that his sisters respect Tommy and Cass’s need for space. As Mom reminded them repeatedly, having children, or not having children, was part of marriage and no one’s business but Tommy and Cass’s.

Of course the Brennan sisters couldn’t ignore Cass, not when they knew she was hurting so much. Without consulting each other, each of them quietly sent Cass private e-mails and text messages, letting her know she was loved. Tommy could refuse meals and visitors, but he couldn’t expect his sisters not reach out to Cass. They loved Cass, and they told her so, repeatedly. Cass didn’t answer all, or even most, messages, but later in December, just before Christmas, she sent her sister-in-laws a group message thanking them for their amazing support and constant love. She hadn’t had sisters, only two younger brothers, and she told them that she felt incredibly lucky to be one of the Brennan girls.

“I’m good,” Cass said softly now, two spots of color in her cheeks. “Well, better than I was in October.” She paused, studying the blue, white, and gold pattern on her dessert plate with the half-eaten slice of birthday cake. “October was bad.  And November.”  Her full mouth quirked and one of her deep dimples appeared. “To be honest, December wasn’t much better either.”

Kit knew Cass had been in a very dark place and yet there had been nothing any of them could do for her then. There was really nothing they could do now. Kit hated feeling helpless. “We’ve been worried about you.”

“I know. And I was kind of worried about me, too,” Cass admitted on a strangled laugh, pushing back the same wayward curl that had slipped out of her ponytail. She had long loose curls and big blue eyes like an innocent shepherdess from a Mother Goose nursery rhyme. In reality she was a labor and delivery nurse at a hospital in Walnut Creek specializing in high-risk deliveries, and far from helpless.

The Good Daughter

“Are you doing better?” Mom asked, a deep furrow between her eyebrows. Mom had been a nurse, too, before she earned her master’s degree and became a hospital administrator.

Cass toyed with the lace edging her white linen napkin. “I don’t know. This last time broke something inside of me. Here I had this beautiful, perfect little boy . . . and my body rejected him.

Killed him—”

“Cassidy!” Meg choked, horrified, glancing toward the hall to make sure none of her kids were listening. “Don’t say that. You’re not responsible. You can’t blame yourself.”

“But I do.” Cass looked up, the grief clouding her eyes. “How can I not? He was twenty-four weeks old. Thirty-six percent of babies can survive premature birth at twenty-four weeks. Instead

my body—” She didn’t finish, pressing a hand to her mouth to keep the words in, but her eyes were enormous with sorrow and pain.

Kit slid out of her chair to wrap her arms around Cass’s shoulder. “I’m so sorry,” she whispered. “So very, very sorry.”

Cass covered Kit’s hands with hers. “I want him back. I want to save him.”

“It’s not fair, is it?” Kit murmured.

“It’s not,” Meg echoed. “Nor does it seem fair that people who shouldn’t have kids pop them out, and those who should have them struggle.”

“I think about that all the time,” Cass said.

“Did you have a name for him?” Mom asked.

Cass nodded. “Thomas. After Dad. Thomas Joseph Brennan.”

“Your own baby Tommy,” Mom said, understanding.

For a moment no one said anything and then Gabi ran into the dining room with a plastic plate from the kitchen, asking if she could please have another slice of cake since her piece had been small. Meg cut her a sliver. Kit asked if she could have another sliver, too. It was good cake. Meg was an excellent baker.

After Gabi left, Mom circled her teacup with her hands. “You won’t ever forget your Tommy,” she said quietly. “I know I’ve told you this before, but I’ve never forgotten the babies I lost. There were three between Meg and the twins. I never knew if they were boys or girls. Back then they didn’t tell you those things. I wondered, though.”

“What did Dad do when you lost them?” Cass asked, brow furrowing.

“Told me he was sorry. That he loved me.” Marilyn paused, looking back, remembering the years of being a young wife and mother. “That I would conceive again. And then he’d go to work.

Escape to his beloved fi rehouse. To his boys.” Her voice held the barest hint of bitterness. “He was lucky. He had somewhere else to go. I was here alone with a toddler.”

The clock in the living room suddenly chimed nine. It caught them by surprise. No one knew when it’d gotten so late, and it was Sunday night, a school night, too. Meg said she’d need to get the kids home soon. They lived in Santa Rosa. And once Meg and Jack left, everyone else would go, too. Tommy and Cass to Walnut Creek. Kit to her small house in Oakland.

“I’d try again,” Cass said in a rush when the clock stopped chiming. “I’ve met with a new specialist, a doctor who thinks he can help me, but Tommy has said no. Says he can’t go through that

again.”

Kit opened her mouth to speak but then thought better of it. She wasn’t married. Had never been married. Wasn’t her place.

Instead Mom said carefully, “Maybe he just needs more time—”

“It’s our eleventh wedding anniversary this year. I want a baby.” Cass’s voice dropped, deepening with emotion. “I don’t want to wait. I can’t wait. I’m ready to be a mom now.”

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Critique Partner Listings February 21 2013

ladyscorpion – ROMANCE


I’m about 3/4 of the way through a contemporary romance. Right now it’s sitting at about 59k and that’s about the length my books usually end up, so I don’t plan on it getting too much longer (I hope). I’m woefully stuck. I’m at the point where I’m banging my head, and I could use someone to go through it with me.


I’ll read pretty much anything, though I don’t read too much inspirational or paranormal. I can give you as in-depth as you need, though I won’t lie. I’m not a grammar guru. I’m better at characterization, flow, emotion, that kind of thing. Critique wise, I’m looking more for big picture right now rather than super in depth.


Anyway, if you’re interested, send me a message and we can exchange chapters, see if we’d match.

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