@downeynl Brilliant! I like this one so much better – not that the other one was bad! I really get to know your MC this time! He´s so present and I can imagine his feelings; his doubts, his fears, the burden on his shoulders.Also, I get to know the enemy more.
Best line (my opinion): “So instead I scream loudly, but only in my thoughts, where my inner demons alone can hear them.”
I wonder what the “shit” is. 😀