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Re: First draft ”Taking over Helix” snippet

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samberinger
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You certainly weren’t lying when you said you worked on showing more than telling; while the story could use a bit more work in some places, it’s not a bad start. I like the tension between your protagonist and her uncle, but it could be expanded on.

Overall, a good start that just needs a bit of polishing.