Yeah I wanted to do something different and the full dialogue thing I understand. That actually comes in later on when he poses as a researcher/surveyor. I figured he would have the journal with him in that position. I realized how much this sucked after I posted it and reread it. The only reason I thought the diary would be a great approach with this story is because of what goes on, but I’m thinking of just scratching the whole thing and starting completely over *sigh* thus is the life of a writer, I suppose. I guess it won’t be so limited in a way if I scratch the idea. I guess only REALLY good writers could write in this style, and I’m just not there yet.
Thanks for the input!