Re: First Page

#4547

Dawn
Participant

Okay, the first page definitely needs editing.

Timeline: Game then Fight. I actually put this in one of his flashbacks and explained how he got in that position anyway. It might need fleshed out a little bit more, but the general backbone is there. He gets to see the news by himself, which causes him to get pissed off and go running. He goes running and meets his love interest, which is followed by a series of events mentioned in my outline regarding The X Factor.

I’m thinking that the only reason Cole attacked Drake is because he’s still pissed off at him. How The Agency gets involved will hopefully be fleshed out soon and possibly added into the edit (yes I do write without knowing all the details).