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Re: First Sentences

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shakespeare
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Perhaps the first paragraph might be more helpful.

That said, some of your first lines are WONDERFUL!!! Far better than mine. My first sentence:

Have you ever smelled a hospital?

Pretty lame. You should have seen it in the first 25 drafts. 🙂

My first paragraph:

Have you ever smelled a hospital? It’s like poison, antiseptic, barf and death all rolled up in a band-aid. It’s why my eyes keep tearing. Or maybe it’s allergies. The smell alone could make anybody sick. Could even kill them.