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Re: First Sentences

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downeynl
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Wow, this forum is getting intense. Lots of great input! =)

@kaylinn57 I love your first line. It definitely gives me a feel of what the rest of the story is going to be like while leaving me wanting more. It’s letting the reader know that there is action currently going on and there’s action that has yet to come.

@jessicafriday. Your first sentence already makes me wonder what’s going on, which will keep me reading but I do think it could have a bit more of a kick. Maybe a bit more detail…. why he’s walking out onto the falling tree- is there danger that’s making him does this? How is he walking -is he being careful, about it or reckless, etc. Adding a few more adjectives will make it grip us even more than it does now.

@shakespeare I like your first paragraph, especially the phrases you use. The phrase “…all rolled up in a bandaid” is really creatively put and the last sentence hooks me.

I’ve always struggled with first sentences, first paragraph, first chapters. Basically anything in the beginning of stories… haha.

But here’s my first sentence:
I will regret this… I’ve barely taken a step out from within a dumpster’s shadow and yet I still know it.