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Re: First Sentences

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jessicafriday
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@downeynl – Great suggestion. I use adverbs much too sparingly! 😉

I love everything about your sentence except for the last word. I already get a sense that something’s about to happen, but I had to do a double-take to connect the “it” with the “regret.” “…and yet still I know it’s a mistake.”?