Re: First Sentences Home / Forums / List of Forums / Young Adult / First Sentences / Re: First Sentences August 17, 2011 at 11:16 pm #4472 TheresaParticipant Thanks everyone for your feedback. I’m rewriting it right now 🙂 You pretty much confirmed what I already knew. Be back later to read and critique a few more. @tracy Rohlfing I like your idea of reposting after we revise. It would be interesting to see the before and after.