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jessicafriday
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@nazarea – Definitely a feeling of suspense here. Who is looking at her? Why is she afraid? But I’d love to see some more descriptive terms to really draw me into the moment, to get a better visual feel for what is going on. Is her form exposed, or is she hiding? Is this a dark interior, or is it set outside in the daylight (and there’s a stalker lurking in the park where she jogs daily)?