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Re: First Sentences

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Jani
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I read in a post recently that if your first line could be the first line of just about any novel, you might need to take another look at it. Pretty straight forward and I think it’s a good way to look at first lines. It should be something that sort of defines your story and gives it the kick start for all the awesomeness that will follow.

@tracy This was such a good idea. I’m having a hard time deciding which first line to post. I agree with Heidi, I would add some emotion. Nothing big, just something to let us know what she’s feeling about leaving.
@Jen I really like your first line, I would definitely keep reading.
@heidi I think your first line is, the only word I can think of, Bang! It definitely caught my interest.
@nefaerious Your first line makes me wonder why her hands are shaking and that’s definitely a good thing.
@laura I like your first sentence but would define it a little more, like giving the reader a little more to work with.

Here’s the first line from my YA Paranormal. At the moment it’s from the first chapter but I’m planning on writing a new first chapter beginning September.

‘She was making me sick again and there was nothing I could do except follow the feeling.’