Re: I Need Help!

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katrina
Participant

The first thing that threw me was this : For Tamin Moon, starting her junior year of high school by finding a locket from the father she never knew wasn’t exactly what she had in mind.

I found myself wonder what’s the big deal about finding a locket. I like the idea of “starting her junior year of high school by…….wasn’t exactly what she had in mind” I just don’t think it should apply to finding the locket because the word locket doesn’t carry any emotional impact. I think it would be better used with the thought that she didn’t expect to unleash dark powers, or become a pawn in an war not her own…etc.

Sounds like a fun read though!