@lyrwriter I think it’s great! I think breaking up that big 2nd paragraph really helped . It flows so much better.
Best of luck!!!! 🙂
I think it was Suzie Townsends (Lit agent for those that don’t know) tweet that I read yesterday. She’d had 350 queries in one week. Just queries alone. She didn’t even mention how many partials or fulls she had to read. We need to make sure our queries stand out amongst all that info.