@allisonmerritt me likey! I would read more of that!
@zdemarco Hi Dawn! I only thought a couple of spots were awkward (the 4th paragraph where she’s turning around…felt a little clunky to me with the numbered list, and then almost sounded like she turns around twice?). I’m thinking you’re really great with characters…I got a nice YA tone from your geekish/smarty/funny MC. I also thought your dialogue was well-paced, which makes me think the rest of your MS is. Nice!
@abigalboone welcome welcome! yup, all romance is allowed here 😀 (though there is a different forum for erotica). Ok, are these guys (and gal) like…demon hunting military?!? I LOVE demons. I LOVE military stuff. Please expound 😀