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xaviira
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Hi Roma,

I’d be interested in swapping critiques with you. I have a full manuscript in need of critique. It’s a YA with a quirky voice that clocks in at 95,000 words. Here’s my synopsis:

Fifteen-year-old Jane Hale has two hundred and eighty three days left to do something extraordinary, or she’ll need to find herself a new set of parents. She doesn’t have to save the world or anything, mind you, but if she doesn’t give the Hales at least one interesting story to share with their relatives, they’re cutting their losses and trading her in for a less boring daughter.

That’s where Billy comes in. He’s an awkward hug away from admitting he’s her boyfriend; unfortunately, he’s also addicted to a virtual reality world that’s being terrorized by a villain run amok. It’s simple, really; all Jane has to do is go into the virtual world and apprehend the fiend. In exchange, Billy promises a much-needed new identity.

Of course, things get considerably less simple when Jane fails in her task . . . and accidentally starts a virtual war in the process. She needs Billy’s help to set things straight, which is rather inconvenient, as he’s managed to disappear from both worlds when things are at their worst. Desperate, Jane is forced to team up with the once-hated villain. They set out on an international mission to bring Billy home, but all they discover is a chilling secret about the virtual world she’s become so fond of.

And she’ll have just one chance to rescue her boyfriend, save her world, and figure out if being ordinary is really so bad after all.

Let me know if you’re interested!

– Janel