November 30, 2017 at 12:58 am #7550
I am a self-publishing author writing her first book. If you are a critique partner, I would love to know your point of view about my writing.
Here’s a little about my book:
The year is 2086, and the long brutal war between Naturals (humans) and Unnaturals (supernatural beings) is over but mystical beings are still being hunted. In hope of having a life where she is respected as an investigator, Cathleen Spurlock keeps her abilities hidden. When she meets Hendrick a mysterious Dragonvire (Half vampire and dragon being) who needs her help to find his missing brother, she decides to risk her secret and help him. If they can find him in time, and keep the enemy from his blood they can stop a horrible curse from happening.December 6, 2017 at 10:25 am #7565
I’m also looking for a critique partner on my first book. It’s been written (and re-written, and re-written, and sent to publishers and is now part-way re-written) so would be happy to trade critique for critique. Yours sounds like a good premise – I’m curious to see how it turns out! Mine is fantasy as well, so this could be a good match! Ping me a message if you’re interested.
EmmaJanuary 2, 2018 at 6:35 pm #7593
Hi 😊 I write urban fantasy (world hopping with magic) with paranormal elements, and a very light romance toward the end of book 1. I’m also looking for a CP partner. I’d also like to note there are Elemental beings, Dragons and Fairies.
Below is a summary of my book (but doesn’t cover all plot points). If you’re interested, send 3 chapters to my email: chenson0870[at]gmail.com. Please include the email address you’d like me to send my 3 chapter to.
UNIVERSE KEEPERS 1 – RECLAIM, is an Urban Fantasy novel about a troubled teen who discovers she’s a gifted healer that may have to turn killer to survive her destiny as a protectress of the Universe. It is complete at 85,344 words with world-hopping and metaphysical aspects.
At nine, KRISTA’S fire power accidentally kills an abusive foster parent. Horrified by her actions, Krista locks her magic in a mental-prison deep inside her subconscious, cuts her connection to her paranormal friends, and denies her destiny.
The Universe hurtles Krista’s fate at her eight years later—a fire erupts at school, and a salamander uncoils from within a fire ball. He demands Krista remember who she is because the evil is already upon them. Krista recalls the dangerous monster inside her, denies what he says, and jumps out the window. Later, hell-hounds corner her at the park, and a supernatural earthquake rips through the library she’s hiding in. A portal to another world appears, and a woman Krista met earlier that day beckons her to enter; Krista leaps in to save herself. While in-between, Krista is snatched by an unknown source and thrown onto the wrong planet.
A hungry Stone-troll attacks. Krista slips through his granite clutches, grabs a branch and holds it high in her shaky hands. A Star-lion descends from the sky, rescues Krista and tells her to embrace her destiny to protect the Universe. He carries her to the woman’s planet. Through misadventures, Krista discovers she’s a healer. Terrified her powers may kill someone again, she refuses to crack open her mental lockboxes and access the magic the Elementals taught her.
Krista’s resolve will be tested because the MASTER-MALICE wants Krista’s allegiance for his own dark purposes. He plans to suck the life-force out of each soul that wronged him and drain every planet dry. He’s twisting innocent animals into walking, talking, human-like creatures, and sending them after Krista. But the vile, creature-malices have their own agenda; they want to crack open Krista’s chest and slurp the light out to amplify their own powers.
Krista may have to convert from healer to killer to survive her destiny. And she must get back to Earth to someone she left in the group home.
Note: I’m a Reiki Master Energy healer, medium, spiritual adviser, and enchant my own herbs. I have an advanced understanding of spiritual energy. This assists my writing and explanation of how their powers work.
I’d prefer to use Word ‘Track Changes’ method to notate our editing comments. If you don’t have Word, please make your comments in-line and highlight them for easy identification. I’ve been told I provide a very detailed edit/critique (If I notice grammar issues, plot issues, holes in scene/sequel combo, unanswered questions, gaps in the 3 Acts = I notate it), and I’d really love someone who would provide the same level of critique for me…I didn’t receive it with the people I swapped with previously, and gave up on CP partners a while back. But I’m very hopeful 😊
My main concerns are if my story is interesting, does the main char (Krista) voice stay consistent given the situation and char arc, is the plot identifiable and stay on target, does my story slow down too much, or become to teacher-ish as I do try to advise how to be mindful and other energy-related methods, and is my deep Point of View consistent or does it go too far with the explanations of emotional reaction/inner thought/physical response that kills the reading pacing/interest.
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