Hi everyone! I suck at writing emotion and creating that emotional connection with the reader. As I seek to improve this quality of my writing, I fear I might have gone too far. I’m worried that I’ve stepped into melodrama or just plain cheesy. So, I am looking for opinions on my scene. It’s 3K words, the prologue to book 2 in an epic fantasy series, and told in third person POV. Anyone out there willing to take a read and tell me if it works or not?