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"No Outlet" Free verse poem LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!

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    sydneygidman1
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    No Outlet
    Magnolia trees in bloom
    Lawns dusted with pink.
    Historic farmhouses lined the road.
    A sheltered suburbia it was assumed.
    Crevices between the asphalt
    filled with secrets unknown.

    As the sun went down
    millions of heavenly bodies came out
    Old lamp posts flickered
    illuminating the hidden sins of the night.

    The echoes of anger consumed this lane
    A man of horror came out to play
    He swallowed the poison
    filled with pain
    smashed his fists against the window pane.

    Even his better half, was not safe from his vicious wrath.
    No longer under this man’s spell
    she shrieked and sobbed
    Yet was trapped in his cell
    Praying to God he would be committed to Hell.

    Children hid from the nocturnal torture.
    None had uttered a peep
    covering their mouths
    so they would not weep.
    Time passed, his children gasped for air
    silently reciting a prayer.

    It was now the witching hour,
    the sinister affairs soon coming to a close
    Cowering in the dark no more.
    The sun will soon ascend
    the evil of the night washed away, by the daylight gleam.

    Sinister ways now concealed
    he walked down the little dead end road
    passing by righteous folk, psychotic tendencies never to be revealed.
    A smile pursed across his lips, dreaming of moment he can take his first sip.

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