March 8, 2013 at 9:54 pm #3530
I’ve several stories always on the lookout for fresh eyes.
But the one that’s first and foremost is my Paranormal, Golden Dawn. Which has just been rewritten and is now at 50,000 words.
I lean more towards fantasy (epic is my drug of choice) in my reading, though science-fictions and paranormals are welcome. Please, no horror. I’m happy to read both YA and Adult in these genres. I’m more comfortable in critiquing third person povs as that’s what I write in, but I can do first person.
Right now, I am able to do weekly feedback on a chapter by chapter basis.
Herald, eldest son of a bloodthirsty strigoi, endured two centuries of hell before escaping into the human world. He watched, helpless, as his twin brother was murdered by the very villagers his father insists on raiding. Though he has reservations about his father’s human-only diet, Herald has nevertheless devoted all of his 1100 years towards protecting his family from outsiders.
Bewildered by his orders to guard the giant crystal held within the castle, Herald doesn’t expect it to hold the spirit of an angel. She is his father’s failed attempt to gain true immortality. One he cannot be rid of. Breaking the crystal would free her, but the uncontained magic would level their sheltered valley. Herald’s deranged sister doesn’t care. She’d rather risk destruction than let the angel influence another sibling.
When the angel’s continued existence becomes more important to Herald than his siblings, it results in that sister’s death and his banishment. But the angel has taken mortal form in preparation to leave this world and her immortal-gifting blood is free for the taking. Now Herald must decide whether his true loyalty lies with his family or his heart. Either choice will demand death. Only the right path will ensure the life taken is not his.
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